Friday, April 20, 2012

Another Query - Aack!

Queries. They’re a bitch, aren’t they?

I swear it was easier writing the book then trying to convey 90,000 words into three short paragraphs. Which might not have been so bad if my book didn’t cross multiple genres.

It’s paranormal. It’s a romance. It’s suspenseful. I want so show them all.

I need a hook. I need to show conflict. Argh, argh, and more argh!

So, here I am again, with a query I need critiqued. If you want to comment – great (I value all criticism). If not, no biggie. I understand. I’m horrible when it comes to giving my opinion, too!

Maybe that’s why I find it so hard to ask for opinions!

Okay, so here goes nothing…

GHOSTLY LIAISON is a paranormal romance of 92,000 words.

After recovering from an accident and coma, Bridget Quigley is sure she’s going crazy, at least that’s her theory when she sees people appear and disappear in a blink of an eye. But when she accepts the house-sitting job for Rob Gentry, the hunky best man from her cousin’s wedding, she discovers she’s not going insane. She just sees ghosts and one in particular – Rob’s sister, Charlie.

Stuck in a world that can’t see or hear her, Charlie’s ecstatic when Bridget can and begs the woman to help her move on. Her murder was staged as a suicide, but Bridget won’t go to the authorities without proof and Charlie doesn’t have any. She suggests asking her brother.

Bridget secretly gleans information from Rob, only to find herself falling in love with the guy. What’s worse, he cares for her, too. But a relationship isn’t in the cards for her. Besides the whole ghost-seeing thing, the accident left her disfigured and unworthy. While her heart and head struggle for dominance, she gathers the proof she needs to help Charlie, and becomes the killer’s next target.

So, does it make sense? Can you tell what the book is about? Is there something majorly lacking? If this is the type of book you like to read, would you open the book?

Even if you don’t want to give an opinion, I thank you for reading this far!

1 comment:

Anne Gallagher said...

Stacy, I'm going to email you with my comments.

IT's a good query, sounds like an interesting book, but... there are a couple of elements that need to be tightened up. And even though I don't read this genre, just from the query I would pick it up.